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Poems, poems everywhere [Mar. 1st, 2011|10:22 pm]
spinthemoon

The Boy has recently become enamored with writing poetry. Today, he told Husband that he showed one of his poems to his teacher, and she thought it was "cute". The Boy found this insulting. When Husband asked him why, he said, "My poems aren't cute." When Husband asked him how he would describe them, he said, "Cultured and wise."

At the moment, I'm tasked with typing up The Boy's poems, since he wants to print them out into a book and give them to his teacher. No doubt to prove that he is indeed cultured and wise. Personally, I'm fond of the hand-written versions, which often come complete with illustrations, like the stick figure of Bob Dylan singing the times they are-a changin.

So while I was typing, I thought I'd share one.

Morning Star

The morning
star lights
the day
bringing
light to
all that
lay in
soft
beds
as it dawns
down
and the
sun shines


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[User Picture]From: quaero_verum
2011-03-02 04:43 am (UTC)
o_O

Yeah, cute. Right.

This is very, very good.
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[User Picture]From: spinthemoon
2011-03-02 05:01 am (UTC)
He actually has quite a way with words. Of course, I never know how much is his alone and how much he picked up from somewhere else (the kid remembers *everything* he's ever read or heard verbatim) but I'm still impressed.

One of his poems had the line, "the redwoods tall and snow thick" which I thought was pretty sophisticated syntax for a nine year old. But of course I'm biased.

Edited at 2011-03-02 05:01 am (UTC)
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[User Picture]From: willstronghold
2011-03-02 04:18 pm (UTC)
I think that he'd like e.e. cummings. "Anyone Lived in a Pretty How Town" comes to mind for some reason. Try and stress to him that if he's going to write wise and cultured poetry, he has to read it and digest it. e.e. cummings and Billy Collins would be great places to start, in my mind and at his age.
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[User Picture]From: spinthemoon
2011-03-03 12:54 am (UTC)
I thought of e.e. cummings as well - he had some interesting use of capitalization and punctuation that I couldn't tell whether was on purpose or just the way he writes. But I think he would really appreciate the rythm and flow of cummings.
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[User Picture]From: sweet3mich
2011-03-02 08:52 pm (UTC)
This is a really great poem! Cultured & Wise indeed.
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From: blissonbliss
2011-03-03 03:29 am (UTC)
Cute? I'm insulted for him. This is cultured and wise.
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[User Picture]From: nevermind_that
2011-03-03 04:53 am (UTC)
Cute is definitely an insult to this kid's budding poetic talent. I am glad he knows it! That is good stuff. Can't ignore natural gifts, but I must say...seems like a bit of good parenting is to thank as well. ;-)
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[User Picture]From: spinthemoon
2011-03-03 05:15 am (UTC)
Ha - I wish I could take credit, but mostly I just either stay out of his way or try to keep up.
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[User Picture]From: onelargecat
2011-03-05 10:37 pm (UTC)
Could you photograph (or scan) the original hand-written ones? Then make the book someplace like Blurb?
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[User Picture]From: spinthemoon
2011-03-06 06:21 am (UTC)
That's a really good idea - I have a file of stuff I've been saving since he was little and at some point should scan and bind it all.
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